Style: I see sentence variety, dashes, semi-colons, colons, words from our vocabulary list, and strong verbs. I see each sentence begin in a unique way, variety in the sentence length and superb quote integration!!! Most students cited well.
Insight: While some thesis statements lack the WOW factor we touched on during class, all the paragraphs have a thesis which includes the author and the title.To do better on the insight mark, spend more time searching the story for clues to the father's character. Try to find quotes that no one else will use!! Be conspiritorial!
Monday: I will return the paragraphs and we will make corrections.
The most common errors were
- Using "this shows" or "it means"
- Struggles with quote integration
- Lack of insight in the thesis
- Apostrophe errors or omissions
- Spelling errors
